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IN THE PARA. 21. REPLACE 'IMMEDIATE' BY ''FURTHER' SECOND SENTENCE. ADD 'DRAFT'' BEFORE BASIC LAW'' IN THE PENULTIMATE SENTENCE. THE LAST SENTENCE SEEMS SUPERFLUOUS, THE POINTS HAVE BEEN MADE IN PARA. 20. I SUGGEST IT BE DELETED.
AS
1)
PARA. 22.
* 'REPRESENTATIVE '' ADD 'DE FACTO'' BEFORE
THE SECOND SENTENCE.
IN
J)
PARA. 24.
ADD **INCLUDING THE GOVERNOR OF HONG KONG'' AT
THE
END.
K)
PARA. 25.
DELETE LAST SENTENCE. WE HAVE YET TO SEE WHETHER THE CHINESE WILL RESPOND CONSTRUCTIVELY TO THE SUBSTANCE OF THE
PAPERS.
L)
PARA. 26. I THINK IT WOULD BE MORE ACCURATE TO REPLACE THE FIRST HALF OF THE SECOND SENTENCE BY THE FOLLOWING
M)
PARA. 26.
REPLACE THE LAST 7 WORDS OF THE FIRST SENTENCE
BY WE WOULD BE UNABLE TO DENY THE POSSIBILITY OF CHANGE IN THAT DIRECTION.''
YOUDE
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MR. GILLMORE
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